Improve and deveop my writing piece,.
I’m working on a Writing exercise and need support.
The task is to write a comparison for two argument paper, and below I uploaded my version of the paper however it wasnt good enough, therefore by looking at the comment and the rubric can you please improve and develop my paper, and I also uploaded the original two argument paper.
heres the link for one of the text (the other text ( What’s wrong with vocational school?) is in the doc below) :
https://www.huffpost.com/entry/anti-intellectualism_b_1498288?guccounter=1&guce_referrer=aHR0cHM6Ly9tYWxheXNpYS5zZWFyY2gueWFob28uY29tLw&guce_referrer_sig=AQAAAKL4_tjw5_tq0BYxrPg7rGHQQtaglH-MqCXq_BgyScPkaw1fCJPS5v38npzsZA7MgLHS0BFioO6ahbHVkgxjFAnsHdwhPPWtXanYkOVUALO1rvxfCD_LjkPRL1q2hvCWxXdKzmAtDAP3o6h8XuR7nl85wg-DCWh-yR0D5z81RV8M (My struggles with anti-intellectualism)
I was hoping to improve the introduction and my professor said I need more paragraphs that compare the 2 article on specific point, you can delete some part if you feel like is not necessary. Also takeout extra space between paragraphs please.